Peer Review 4

Jessica Aramini

Hi Jessica, your written letter to Miss Slattery is effective in conveying your passion as a feminist towards Miss Slattery commenting on her empowering motives, as well as your reflection of Mr. Szabo and Misses Slattery’s relationship. Especially notable is your reflection towards Mr. Slazo and Miss Slattery’s relationship symbolism towards unbalanced relationships in the 1960’s not only expressed your views but also expresses a deeper knowledge what the story attempts tackle in regards towards its themes of female individuals and sexual liberation. 

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CRITICAL – Henry Lawson or Banjo Paterson? Explain briefly your understanding of why these two authors were so different in their views of the Australian experience. 

The Australian experience is a question that has often been interpreted in various ways, in consequence to its intricacies in what even defines an Australian? Henry Lawson and Banjo Paterson’s attempts towards interpreting the Australian experience has added emphasis towards the complexities attempting to represent the Australian experience. Paterson appeals to Australia’s idolized standards of a youthful nation’s heroism and optimism. However, Lawson’s portrayal reflects a dystopian narrative in reflecting a realism. 

Paterson’s ballad “The Man from Snowy River” utilises the Australian outback to symbolize the Australia as a newfound nation embodied through the hopes of a young rider. The “underdog” narrative who rises to the adversities and triumphs. It is the young rider’s conviction and determination of becoming a household name that reflects Australia’s aspirations as a newfound nation. Paterson idealistic narrative reflected Australia’s desire to be acknowledged as its own nation compared well-established nations such as Britain. 

In contrast, Lawson’s realism and naturalistic approach in his literary work, “faces in the streets” had challenged Paterson’s romanticism. Lawson felt that the idealist narrative came at the expense of social context with the poor and jobless suffering being the “owners of the sad faces in the street”. Lawson directly calls out the “apathy of wealthy men…” that is reflected in Paterson’s aristocratic background as his idealistic reflected Australia’s ideal role model, but not its problems. 

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Cameron Cole

Hi Cameron, your poem’s conveyance of William Pigenuit’s Kosciuszko is very well written encapturing a very telling image of landscape art piece. Your descriptive use of many subjects within the composition allows for vivid imagery such as “moss-speckled lumps/ yellowing grass/ sparse brush”. Alternatively, your adjectives assist in encapsulating moving image throughout adjectives in describing the “endless clouds/ piercing the fog/ slumbering for eternity” contribute in creating a moving image of vast wild outback. 

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Creative – Write a letter to Miss Slattery telling her what you think about the decision she made to leave Szabo. 

Dear, Miss Slattery 

Dear, Miss Slattery I had just heard the news of your decision to leave Szabo and I cannot help but express my support for you. I could never agree with your relationship in the first place, the relationship just seemed to have a disbalance and it felt as though in a way he was just using you, borderline abuse almost! He was quite the big honestly, never was unsympathetic to your own feelings and even went as far as to express distaste in your own name. A tyrant would be an understatement in the way he treated you, he hated the way you expressed love and seemed to only want a carnal relationship with you. Though, honestly when I heard you got out a stock whip at that party, it was honestly shocking. Although, I am glad to see that you’ve changed after that party, that was when something was different about you… Almost a like a glass veil had been shattered and you finally took control for once. Either way, I’m sure you no longer want to talk about him after deciding to leave him. I wish to you best as your newfound life with independence. 

With Regards  

Dylan Versola 

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Gavin Tran

Hi Gavin, I see you’ve done ‘First Class Marksman’ by Sidney Nolan, I did the same task. You have done well in critically analyses, mentioning the technique of symbolism that flows through this art piece speculating the outlaw’s nature, depicted in a negative light, a well-crafted blog review. One suggestion would be to add the picture of work itself with reference to either Michael Griffith’s site from the task or from the NSW art gallery

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1/ CREATIVE Take any single Australian painting that you saw at the gallery yesterday (it must be one that you saw) and write a description either in poetry or prose. Pay close attention to detail in your description. What you are in fact doing in this exercise is a piece of Ekphrastic Writing. Check up the meaning of this word! 

Eugene von Guérard, Milford Sound, New Zealand (1877-1879) image via Art Gallery NSW

I walk to see a landscape painting enrapture me in its own scenery as I witness lands presence stare at me, as a miniscule ant. As I continue to stare at the vast composition of this monumental piece, I notice the smaller signs of life that further establish my place in its space as a small being, with the smallest canoe in the reflective lake. From the blue skies that are presented enveloping me in this vastness. The grand mountains shown in full display with the mirrored water from the lake creates an atmosphere of ethereal divinity, unconquered by civilization. The landscape does not stare at me, with veracity nor intimidation, but that of a sacred divinity. My sense of minority does not come from just a mountain, nor the sky or even the puny canoe but the paintings long shot of all elements together creating a unity to establish its extensive landscape. The objects of this piece are not in dissonance but resonance to one another, echoing the voluminous Milford sound to me from the start to the end of my captivation of this art piece. 

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Critical – Write a brief description of this painting of Ned Kelly. What do you think it is saying about Ned Kelly’s status in the 20th Century

Image provided via Michael Griffith’s Blog site

The image in question seems to be a depiction of Ned Kelly’s use of his weapon being a shotgun, revealing a more threatening aspect of the outlaw. Combined with his gun is his posture revealing himself to be on caution with his hands on the gun aiming it.  Another observation is Kelly’s abstract black attire being his armor, a dichotomy to the lighter greenery representing the Australian wildlife, which is connotative with the 20th century perceived Kelly as a missing outlaw during his time. The surrounding nature could imply that it was Kelly’s hiding space with there being no signs of civilisation with mountains and trees being present rather than towns or people. This imagery leads me to conclude that the 20th century perceived Ned Kelly as somewhat dangerous outlaw to Australia in consequence to his weaponry that was difficult to find due to his hiding place surrounded, that I deduced from the scenery of nature.

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    In its content this is a potentially beautiful, expressive piece Dylan, but the grammar and the choice of vocabulary are…

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    HI Dylan, firstly it is a Summative (not Summatative) entry!!! Your summative entry contains many good ideas. You are a…

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    Some real sensitivity in the way you bring this unique landscape to life Dylan! Good work. *Please attend to editing…

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    Supportive and detailed, but more attention needed on your own final editing…. 🙂 *Please attend to editing your work carefully.…

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    Good supportive and detailed peer review Dylan. Well done. *Please attend to editing your work carefully. Here is what I…

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Erika Mei Tan

Hello Erika your blog review’s focus on the poem ‘Urbanised Reebocks‘, written by Lisa Bellear, is an extensively detailed critical blog, with the expression of your emotional state throughout is self-reflective. Erika you provide background information of Bellear and input of the poems subject matter. Going as far to place quotations that emphasis your self-reflection of urban lifestyle juxtaposed of nature. However, your blog is too extensive, going over the word limit (293), nonetheless well written. 

  1. michaelgriffith1's avatar

    In its content this is a potentially beautiful, expressive piece Dylan, but the grammar and the choice of vocabulary are…

  2. michaelgriffith1's avatar

    HI Dylan, firstly it is a Summative (not Summatative) entry!!! Your summative entry contains many good ideas. You are a…

  3. michaelgriffith1's avatar

    Some real sensitivity in the way you bring this unique landscape to life Dylan! Good work. *Please attend to editing…

  4. michaelgriffith1's avatar

    Supportive and detailed, but more attention needed on your own final editing…. 🙂 *Please attend to editing your work carefully.…

  5. michaelgriffith1's avatar

    Good supportive and detailed peer review Dylan. Well done. *Please attend to editing your work carefully. Here is what I…

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Critical – Which poem or story that we have looked at so far made an impression on you? What was the impression it made? Why did it touch your feelings and imagination?

A mid-summer noon in Australian forest

The continuous use of personification throughout Charles Harpur’s ‘A mid-summer noon in the Australian Forrest’ invigorated my imagination through its slumberous pacing, it presents imagery to my head of the sunset nearing nightfall. Its use of an adjective that insinuated slumber reminds me of the times of when I was a child and my mother would attempt for me to nap at around the afternoon. In consequence, to its theme of sleepiness it’s pacing reflected its intentions being slow, almost a drowsiness while allowing to absorb the material and feel a relaxation hit me. As well as, It’s descriptions such as “heaves of slumberous breathe” of the ocean sea breeze reminds of a naps I would take as a child in a day care at a mid-summer noon hearing breathing and being entirely relaxed throughout it’s our time. The poem overall engages me through it’s descriptive use of language with metaphors and personification used through making me reminiscence over the nostalgic days of when i was a child and would relax being surrounded in that environment.

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